My attempt to compete with HB&B, Mendoza and EFW!

[Dizzle.]

Good read that mate!

 

[thebazillionaire]

great read..................Who does HB&B refer to?

 

[poidy]

Quick sub on a few points while I'm procrastinating, bloody good read though. TLO - you are right, my understanding of English is essentially haphazard at best...



It's easy to see why, too - with neither...



Colon should be instead of the comma after "post"



"...it is a fine tribute to both Sheffield and the north as a whole"?



Bit of flicking between tenses...was?



"end" after "away", "perspective" not "prospective"



Colon not comma...



Questions have to end with question marks



Tenses switched again



If you're gonna use "Wednesday" got to use "Albion" as well really



Comma before "however", hyphen after. Seeing as it's repetition of "however" I'd probably switch it round to something like "The Owls took first blood in the 38th minute when a well-worked move..."



American - with an s in English



Albion failed to create any clear-cut chances despite having plenty of possession as the game drew to a close. Wednesday looked more threatening and should have put the game to bed with two far-post headers that went over the bar.



consistency of nicknames

You've got way to much time on your hands.

Good read but i would suggest that for future blogs you make them slightly shorter. No need to detail every step of your day from the moment you leave Sussex. Other than that for a 16 year old pretty impressive work.

 

[Chicken Run]

Of the the three bloggers you mentioned, your's is the best imo!

 

[Mr Banana]

You've got way to much time on your hands.

You are not wrong

 

[Vankleek Hill Seagull]

Being a tad picky here. The twin cooling towers no longer exist. I think they were knocked down last year? Apart from that, a good blog.

 

[FalmerforAll!**]

Mr Banana - When it comes to my two English A levels next year, I certainly know who I'll be sending my coursework to for a proof read!

Thanks for the feedback one and all.

 

[Mr Banana]

Mr Banana - When it comes to my two English A levels next year, I certainly know who I'll be sending my coursework to for a proof read!

Yes please mate. Always welcome

 

[Shoreham Beach Seagull]

That's a good read Matt, Carlisle will hopefully be a better result than at Sheffield for your next blog :albion1:

 

[Deleted User X18H]

I thought you were someone who understood English...

A good read, Matt.

BTW, don't demean yourself by thinking you're competing with HB&B. He'll twist this comment himself, but there is no competition, really.

Top effort Matt and thanks for your later comments. Why TLO has to use this thread keep trying to fuel the war I have no idea. Since abusive PM's his peculiarness have made me steer well clear of him.

Excellent have fun keep it up. If you still have access to your Argus account take it back there. You might be suprised at the hidden benefits if you were succesful with it. As I am sure you would be.

 

[1066familyman]

Good stuff.

That's pretty impressive for someone so young. Keep up the good work !

 

[FalmerforAll!**]

My latest installment is up, documenting the journey to Carlisle.

 

[Shoreham Beach Seagull]