Article about Brighton on State of the Game website

[GingerBeerMan]

I assume they are a bitter, lonely individual. That, or jealous. Probably a Palace fan.

Another Palace thread

 

[Arthur]

Even his bio is far too long!

About the author Joe Ashdown

Joe is a Manchester United fan that lives in Brighton (typical United fan then). He has held a keen interest in football at all levels ever since he got hooked on the beautiful game during the Panini Football '87 school sticker craze. His first live match came at the comparatively late age of 17 one bitterly cold winter's night in 1995 at the gone but not forgotten Goldstone Ground (now home to Toys R Us) when Brighton lost on penalties to Fulham in the 1st round of the FA Cup, then of the Endsleigh League Division 3. His first live match at Old Trafford came in 2004 against Sparta Prague and saw Ruud Van Nistelrooy score 4 goals and Karel Poborsky get a red card before receiving a standing ovation. Since then, he has managed to see Manchester United and Brighton in the flesh on numerous occasions, as well as a number of other teams and he also likes to catch the odd live game in the Ryman League where football's soul remains fully intact. In his spare time when he is not working or watching football (not often then), Joe is a keen cricket fan and enjoys live music and live comedy.

So a United fan who didn't go to see his side until he was 26 but has now been to live games on "numerous" occasions. What happened in the nine year after you got bitten by the bug?? Guess the trains must have been on the blink or the motorways shut?

 

[joeinbrighton]

Even his bio is far too long!
So a United fan who didn't go to see his side until he was 26 but has now been to live games on "numerous" occasions. What happened in the nine year after you got bitten by the bug?? Guess the trains must have been on the blink or the motorways shut?

I was waiting until someone brought that up. Started watching football when I was 7, so we are talking here about the Hand of God, Josimar from 40 yards vintage. Don't really come from a football supporting family and so it wasn't until quite a few years later that first saw a game in the flesh. I went to a number of Brighton games after the one mentioned in my SOTG profile, got eminently sensible in the late 90s when I was studying and confined my watching of the game to watching the non-league scene. It wasn't until the middle part of the last decade that I had the disposable income necessary to go and watch my first love, so to speak. These days, I enjoy watching a game at whatever level. Was at a Whitehawk game last week for example, but have also taken in the AMEX on a few occasions now.

 

[Southern Scouse]

So you are a manc red, living in Brighton who likes cricket?
Do you support Lancashire?
Some good points and a decent read, could do with a spell checker though.

 

[joeinbrighton]

So you are a manc red, living in Brighton who likes cricket?
Do you support Lancashire?
Some good points and a decent read, could do with a spell checker though.

Curious about the last point. What did I misspell? Given that I'm somebody that prides myself on my spelling, I'm intrigued to know what it is that I've spelt wrong other than capitalising the suffix of the second part of CMS's initials.

And no, I'm a Sussex CCC fan.

 

[Brovion]

I was waiting until someone brought that up. Started watching football when I was 7, so we are talking here about the Hand of God, Josimar from 40 yards vintage. Don't really come from a football supporting family and so it wasn't until quite a few years later that first saw a game in the flesh. I went to a number of Brighton games after the one mentioned in my SOTG profile, got eminently sensible in the late 90s when I was studying and confined my watching of the game to watching the non-league scene. It wasn't until the middle part of the last decade that I had the disposable income necessary to go and watch my first love, so to speak. These days, I enjoy watching a game at whatever level. Was at a Whitehawk game last week for example, but have also taken in the AMEX on a few occasions now.

So why do you support Man U then? Just asking like, no malice intended.

 

[Pevenseagull]

A decent article which certainly fits the brief suggested by the title of the site. A non Albion supporter would be able to get a good handle on the state of the club from it so well done. BUT

"But whereas Reading’s new stadium and its self-eponymous chairman’s deep pockets provided a springboard to push on, Brighton were hamstrung by still not having a new home."

?

I know what you're trying to say but that's not way to write it (I am an irritating pedant)

 

[joeinbrighton]

"But whereas Reading’s new stadium and its self-eponymous chairman’s deep pockets provided a springboard to push on, Brighton were hamstrung by still not having a new home."

?

I know what you're trying to say but that's not way to write it (I am an irritating pedant)

That's a fair observation.

 

[Arthur]

I was waiting until someone brought that up. Started watching football when I was 7, so we are talking here about the Hand of God, Josimar from 40 yards vintage. Don't really come from a football supporting family and so it wasn't until quite a few years later that first saw a game in the flesh. I went to a number of Brighton games after the one mentioned in my SOTG profile, got eminently sensible in the late 90s when I was studying and confined my watching of the game to watching the non-league scene. It wasn't until the middle part of the last decade that I had the disposable income necessary to go and watch my first love, so to speak. These days, I enjoy watching a game at whatever level. Was at a Whitehawk game last week for example, but have also taken in the AMEX on a few occasions now.

Not slating you for it, well ok I am a bit, but your bio does make you sound like a bit of div!

Oh look the premier league happened, Euro 96 was great, football is cool! All aboard the bandwagon!!

No one is going to be impressed that you've been to numerous games unless it's numerous thousands of games.

 

[Bean]

I enjoyed it.

 

[joeinbrighton]

Not slating you for it, well ok I am a bit, but your bio does make you sound like a bit of div!

Oh look the premier league happened, Euro 96 was great, football is cool! All aboard the bandwagon!!

No one is going to be impressed that you've been to numerous games unless it's numerous thousands of games.

I've written quite a number of articles for SOTG about various clubs and knew that people would inevitably ask who I supported and so I took a decision quite early on after I started writing for them that I'd be transparent about who I supported rather than have people be forever inquisitive or jump to the wrong conclusions. I'm not trying to 'impress' anybody in my profile other than to give some sort of background as to how I came to be writing on a football website rather than just to use the profile to say I support the preservation of badgers etc.! I might streamline the profile though, as verbosity is my Achilles heel.

 

[MJsGhost]

What did I misspell?

The only one I've seen is Wilfred Zaha (instead of Wilfried). I much prefer Winifred anyway...

Seeing as you're asking for feedback... My opinion is that you're trying to be a bit too wordy. Not just in the sense that the article is long (and if Albion fans such as myself & others here find it long, fans of other teams will switch off very quickly), but also in the sense that you've overdone the flowery language.

I like it, just heavy going at times.

 

[MJsGhost]

verbosity is my Achilles heel.

Agreed!

 

[Blackadder]

Good read. Cheers.

 

[Sussex on Leith]

Nice balanced piece. Agree with other posters that you could cut it back a bit, but I don't think it's a bad thing to err on that side and refine your style over time. Better that than to leave arguments unsubstantiated in the name of brevity.

Entertained by the Saints troll as well, especially where he says "They simply must finish top 6 this season for Poyet to have done a ‘good job.’ Anything has to be labelled as a failure."

I appreciate that he probably meant to include the word "less", but his point of view is probably better expressed without it...

 

[poidy]

As mentioned above you need to cut down on the flowery language and verbiage.

If for no other reason than to prepare yourself for any potential future blogs aimed at the Nigels.

Other than that a very good read

 

[Southern Scouse]

Curious about the last point. What did I misspell? Given that I'm somebody that prides myself on my spelling, I'm intrigued to know what it is that I've spelt wrong other than capitalising the suffix of the second part of CMS's initials.

And no, I'm a Sussex CCC fan.

As you follow SCCC I will just give you one to be going on with "Brighton’s travails were not yet complete an...........".

 

[joeinbrighton]

As you follow SCCC I will just give you one to be going on with "Brighton’s travails were not yet complete an...........".

Travails is spelt correctly there, as in struggles. Unless you thought I was meaning to spell 'travels' of course.

 

[DarrenFreemansPerm]

I assume they are a bitter, lonely individual. That, or jealous. Probably a Palace fan.



Really? Do share.

Definitely a Saints fan

 

[Southern Scouse]

Travails is spelt correctly there, as in struggles. Unless you thought I was meaning to spell 'travels' of course.

Thought about designing crosswords? The word "Trevails" in any type of football blog is arguably misplaced however, well intentioned.
Doesn't change the fact that you wrote a good item.