What do you think of my mates story

[killer miller]

Used to live in Ipswich and his Dad was born there and his Mum was born in Hailsham. Dad brought him up as a town fan but his mum is a Brighton fan so he used to all ways want them to do well. He had a season ticket at Ipswich for 6 years until his dad died then he moved down to Hastings and is now a season ticket holder at Brighton. What do you think about his story?

 

[Randsta]

It's hardly lord of the rings....I doubt it's going to get published imho!

 

[Simster]

It's hardly lord of the rings....I doubt it's going to get published imho!

On the other hand, it's better than anything Jeffrey Archer has written.

 

[Billy the Fish]

Riveting

 

[Badger]

The first chapter is good but it goes downhill from there. I was expecting some sort of twist at the end but it's a little bit too predictable

 

[Chamberpot]

Brighton and Hove albion, "The team who nicks fans from other clubs"

 

[Gully]

Sounds like a lucky escape to me.

 

[MattBackHome]

At least it has a happy ending.

 

[Dick Knights Mumm]

I think it needs a love angle. I think you could expand on the reason for moving to Hastings. Although try not to be too verbose.

 

[Randsta]

Could do with sexing up a bit ....(see labour pre Iraq war)

 

[Lewes Seagull]

What's an Ipswich fan?

 

[Butch Willykins]

It's a sensational story.

It's got it all.

I would recommend it to anyone.

 

[Biscuit]

 

[mejonaNO12 aka riskit]

It needs a gay sex-scene.

 

[Tybalt]

Will they make the film in 3D?

 

[Manx Shearwater]

Needs more character development. And a love angle. A gay love angle. Stands more chance of getting commissioned by the BBC then.

 

[pipkin112]

Used to live in Ipswich and his Dad was born there and his Mum was born in Hailsham. Dad brought him up as a town fan but his mum is a Brighton fan so he used to all ways want them to do well. He had a season ticket at Ipswich for 6 years until his dad died then he moved down to Hastings and is now a season ticket holder at Brighton. What do you think about his story?

Add a car chase and some nudity and i think you'll get a movie deal.

 

[Amexican]

Should be a tractor involved somewhere?

 

[skipper734]

Needs a bit of a sex angle to become a real page turner. Maybe the Mum is a bit of a Milf?

 

[countryman]

I'm sure it will make it onto channel 5, but it hasn't got a chance of getting onto the BBC.