From The Outside Looking In

[SR93]

Evening all.

As a budding sports journalist I try to cover as much as I can within the world of football and your club has been lucky enough to have been my focus for my most recent piece.

All feedback, positive and negative, is appreciated but try and make any criticism constructive rather than saying I've written a load of shite!

Thanks!

Link - The Ascension Of The Albion

 

[Smithy]

Good read that, thanks. No real criticism but I believe our chairman made most of his money through business deals and property rather than poker playing which is more of a hobby (he is just a very good poker player).

 

[SR93]

Good read that, thanks. No real criticism but I believe our chairman made most of his money through business deals and property rather than poker playing which is more of a hobby.

Noted and edited, thanks.

 

[Fur Cough]

Evening all.

As a budding sports journalist I try to cover as much as I can within the world of football and your club has been lucky enough to have been my focus for my most recent piece.

All feedback, positive and negative, is appreciated but try and make any criticism constructive rather than saying I've written a load of shite!

Thanks!

Link - The Ascension Of The Albion

I'm so glad we are "Lucky enough" to be the focus of your recent "piece" of attenention seeking second rate load of litteeray bollocks.

 

[RowleyBirkinQ.C(deceased)]

I was just going to say the same thing about bloom, but overall a really good piece. It's never been a more interesting and exciting time for a fan and a neutral like yourself to follow the boys in the old Brighton blue

 

[clippedgull]

Nice piece, although you could have used an updated picture of the Amex!

 

[SR93]

I'm so glad we are "Lucky enough" to be the focus of your recent "piece" of attenention seeking second rate load of litteeray bollocks.

Clearly the concept of sarcasm hasn't yet reached your particular area.

Thanks for the feedback, what would you suggest I do to improve my second rate literary bollocks?

I was just going to say the same thing about bloom, but overall a really good piece. It's never been a more interesting and exciting time for a fan and a neutral like yourself to follow the boys in the old Brighton blue

Indeed; I know a few Brighton fans so look out for their results. Seems like a great time to be a supporter of your lot as you say!

Nice piece, although you could have used an updated picture of the Amex!

I'll try and find one and edit it, thanks!

 

[strings]

I enjoyed that

 

[The Sock of Poskett]

It's a decent piece, although I think if you re-read your second paragraph you'll agree it doesn't read as smoothly as it might. As an ex-sports ed/sub, that would be the section I'd be chucking back at you for a re-write. Also most estimations of our possible seating expansion put the increased capacity at much nearer 30,000 than 35k. Not sure where you got that figure from.

But overall it's a decent summary and few Albion fans would quibble with your conclusions about the forthcoming season. PM me if you want any more in depth comment.

 

[Everest]

I don't think it's "attenention (sic) seeking second rate load of litteeray (sic) bollocks".
Nice read.

So you'll try to find an updated photo?
You might find that a bit hard, I don't think anyone's taken photos of it (sarcasm has reached my area)

 

[SR93]

I enjoyed that

Cheers.

It's a decent piece, although I think if you re-read your second paragraph you'll agree it doesn't read as smoothly as it might. As an ex-sports ed/sub, that would be the section I'd be chucking back at you for a re-write. Also most estimations of our possible seating expansion put the increased capacity at much nearer 30,000 than 35k. Not sure where you got that figure from.

But overall it's a decent summary and few Albion fans would quibble with your conclusions about the forthcoming season. PM me if you want any more in depth comment.

Yeah, I was trying to sort it but ended up leaving it as writer's block became too frustrating!

Will PM you shortly.

 

[wunt be druv]

yeah,fair play to you,a pretty good article and refreshing to see somebody not banging on about how Southampton are so bloody great and how "Big Sam" is as good as promoted,the fat wanker!Nice one mate.

 

[RowleyBirkinQ.C(deceased)]

I'm so glad we are "Lucky enough" to be the focus of your recent "piece" of attenention seeking second rate load of litteeray bollocks.

The comment "lucky enough" looked rather tongue in cheek to me. Plus the guy may take your criticism a little more seriously if you could spell literary

 

[Seagulls4life]

No problems with that. Good read mate.

 

[Fur Cough]

At the point you wrote "flew the nest" which was roghly one sntence in, it was clear your ability as a writer is copied from the majotity of freelance "hacks" desperatley seeking an extra few quid that could be paid by one of the glossy football "lads" mags.

And just so you know, "sarcasm" is the lowest form of wit, pracised by the weakest, in order to disarm the ptential assailant.

 

[SR93]

I don't think it's "attenention (sic) seeking second rate load of litteeray (sic) bollocks".
Nice read.

So you'll try to find an updated photo?
You might find that a bit hard, I don't think anyone's taken photos of it (sarcasm has reached my area)

Thanks, managed to find a picture from inside the stadium so have used that instead.

yeah,fair play to you,a pretty good article and refreshing to see somebody not banging on about how Southampton are so bloody great and how "Big Sam" is as good as promoted,the fat wanker!Nice one mate.

No problem, nice of them to keep up with you last season, eh?

The comment "lucky enough" looked rather tongue in cheek to me. Plus the guy may take your criticism a little more seriously if you could spell literary

Very much a tongue in cheek comment!

Criticism like that is irrelevant as there's no substance to it whereas what The Sock Of Poskett said is a lot more beneficial for my development as a writer.

No problems with that. Good read mate.

Thanks!

 

[casbom]

Good little piece mate, I believe the capacity is to be extended to 30k not 35k as far as I know.

If you really want to know what it takes to be a sports journalist, we have a poster called "Not Andy Naylor", he's a freelance sportswriter, so he might be able to give some advice. Why don't you PM him to see what he thinks?

 

[Jimmy's gonna get ya!]

At the point you wrote "flew the nest" which was roghly one sntence in, it was clear your ability as a writer is copied from the majotity of freelance "hacks" desperatley seeking an extra few quid that could be paid by one of the glossy football "lads" mags.

And just so you know, "sarcasm" is the lowest form of wit, pracised by the weakest, in order to disarm the ptential assailant.

Mate do yourself a favour, shut up. You can't type let alone spell.

 

[SR93]

Good little piece mate, I believe the capacity is to be extended to 30k not 35k as far as I know.

If you really want to know what it takes to be a sports journalist, we have a poster called "Not Andy Naylor", he's a freelance sportswriter, so he might be able to give some advice. Why don't you PM him to see what he thinks?

I read somewhere that the capacity was expandable to an approximate 35k; can't remember where but hey ho.

Will get in touch with that poster, cheers for the heads up.

 

[Fur Cough]

Mate do yourself a favour, shut up. You can't type let alone spell.

I'm not the one trying to pass myself as writer.